Good Recruiter VS Bad Recruiter
Comments(0) I received 2 inMails from two separate recruiters today, 11 minutes apart.
The first was Excellent. The second was Terrible.
Sentence-by-sentence feedback below.
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Excellent
From: Katty Douraghy
[1]Subject: open to FT roles in the Bay Area or just contract?[2]Hi Kevin,
[3]I saw your profile here and wanted to reach out. [4]My name is Katty and my company Artisan is a staffing and recruitment agency in LA & SF.[5]I am currently working with a client in the Bay Area who is in the mobile/social media space with a focus on music & sports verticals. [6]They are looking for a web apps developer–but the role is fulltime. [7]Are you open to FT too or just contract?
[8]In either case I’d love to speak with you since we do work with clients on both Temp and FT needs–so even if this one isn’t right, I’d like to stay connected for future opportunities too.
[9]Is there a number where I can reach you so I can share more about this role and learn more about you?
Thanks,
Katty
www.artisancreative.com
[10]310-312-2062 x117
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- Oh, you have a question about my resume.
- Hey, you know my name!
- So that’s how you found me.
- Ahha, you work for a recruiting agency.
- I see that you have a focused talent pool you are targeting.
- That sounds like something I might be interested in.
- A very specific question. I had better respond.
- Sounds like an open door to me.
- A specific request for my personal contact information…
- And hey look, you even have a phone number…
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Terrible
From: Pemberton Gordon III
[1]Subject: Re: Hiring Tiny Prints -Sunnyvale, CA[2]Tiny Prints is building a work class technology team. [3]Adnon VP of Engineering was a key contributor in building technology at Yahoo. [4]Is presently at Tiny Prints building a world class technology team with some interesting challenges and opportunities: scalability, mobility, and personalization. [5]Tiny Prints is a online retailer of customized and personalized stationery. [6]Company is well funded and profitable. [7]We have offer base, bonus , and equity. [8]We are looking for people interested in building something great. [9]I would love to tell you our story and give you some compelling reasons of why you should explore opportunities at Tiny Prints.
Hiring:
UI Design
Product Managers
Web Developers ( Front and Back End)[10]P.O.C. is [11]pemberton.gordon@tinyprints.com http://ww.tinyprints.com
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- The subject says RE:, but this is obviously a forged reply.
- You are building a “work class” technology team? Who would want to be a working class technologist?
- Is Adnon part of the job title? Or is Adnon a first name? What is his/her last name? Or is that just a typo? Or maybe your VP of Engineering prefers to remain anonymous?
- Your third sentence is not a sentence.
- Tiny Prints is a online retailer, or an online retailer?
- Company is well funded? Who’s company? I assume you just forgot to replace the word “Company” with “TinyPrints” and don’t know anything about their finances.
- You have offer base and bonus? I don’t know what that means. I assume it means you offer equity and bonuses.
- We are looking for
people interested in building something greatidiots. - You won’t even bother forming a proper sentence and you want to give me advice?
- I’ve never heard the jargon P.O.C. – I assume it stands for Point of Contact.
- Do you really work for tinyprints? Cause I get the impression that you are an independent recruiter (which you are).
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